| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 11/06/02 at 05:36 PM Unique description of how we sometimes mistakingly misinterpret others' feelings/affections. You might want to change lying together to swimming together in ther third stanza as it implies you've slept together, when I think your main message here is that she doesn't love you or maybe she did sleep with you but doesn't love you??? Hard to tell, so maybe some strengthening of truths/details. |
| Posted by Christina Bruno on 11/16/02 at 02:11 AM Oh how we are blinded by the external in lu of the internal...and how foolish we feel when we misinterpret |
| Posted by Glenn Currier on 02/08/03 at 02:34 PM I like the "fabric" of your poems... I especially relate to the rustic sort. Your images are compelling... the loss, the different reality dreams visit upon us... Namaste! my friend. |
| Posted by Kara Hayostek on 04/11/03 at 03:05 AM i can completely understand this, and i like the use of mermaids since they are after all mythical creatures, just like love sometimes its just not real. |
| Posted by John Ilotan on 04/11/03 at 03:06 AM A fantastic and original poem. "A mermaid you are sans fins A king i am sans wins I thought, without you", great line, great write.
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| Posted by Philip F De Pinto on 04/18/03 at 11:44 AM A prescious pearl of a poem. I was wondering, Vimal, does this mermaid have a sister? |
| Posted by Charles J Hannan on 06/28/03 at 02:57 AM A brilliant underwater dream fantasy with a twist...nicely done Vimal!! |
| Posted by Max Bouillet on 07/03/03 at 03:34 PM Great poem; I truly enjoyed the images it put in my mind. |
| Posted by Stephanie Kent on 07/27/03 at 09:57 PM This is absolutely exquisite...incredible...your poetry leaves me spellbound. |
| Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 09/08/03 at 05:10 AM A mermaid you are sans fins
A king i am sans wins
I thought, without you
this is brilliant... like a tapestry, your poem it is... blessings... |
| Posted by Shayla R Cakes on 10/19/03 at 12:12 AM very nice :) all the world loves a mermaid, but in love? that's a step :) |
| Posted by Nicole D Gregory on 11/15/09 at 02:28 AM Really love this piece... (from a mermaid at heart - who fears the breaking of hearts). ~N |
