| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gregory O'Neill on 05/19/12 at 07:58 PM Anyone who ever put rocks in their mouth as a kid will know what you mean...I can feel them still (though I don't think I ever swallowed) coarse, with a strong desire to spit them out. But here you swallow them down... unpleasant, truly. Nice write amid your decided economy of words. Thanks. |
| Posted by Rhiannon Jones on 05/19/12 at 08:08 PM Wow, I can just see this steaming and sizzling as it goes down. Nice write! |
| Posted by A. Paige White on 05/19/12 at 10:35 PM Wow! I'd love to see your ode to aspartame after reading some of the horrific reports I just read about it. Fantastic! |
| Posted by Jody Pratt on 05/22/12 at 03:25 PM Wonderful. Just the right length, and you provide a great contrast from hard pill to candy to cancer. |
| Posted by Kris Mara on 05/27/12 at 02:43 PM incredible...the progression...the efficiency...love it. |
