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by Uriel TovarWe
Moon
And earth
Pull tides
And draw fates
Destinies of drowned cities
And beached ships
Caused by our constant dance
Of push and pull.
You twirl on your side
As I lead you
With utter faith
In and out of darkness.
05/08/2012 Posted on 05/09/2012
Copyright © 2025 Uriel Tovar
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Jody Pratt on 05/22/12 at 03:31 PM I would simplify this. The beginning and end are so beautiful, the middle seems to be too plain for the rest of it. May I suggest something like:
"We
Moon
And earth
Pull tides
And dance.
You twirl on your side
As I lead you
With utter faith
In and out of darkness." |
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