We’ve etched them
Into each other:
Promises
Hopes
And songs
Around our eyes
And into our mouths
The very dreams
We’ve longed for
Coming through in
This person
Whom we’ve known
For an instant
In the eternity that will
Be our lives.
Well woven. I like the imagery the line "around our eyes" creates. If I had any critique for this poem it would be the first two lines.
"We’ve etched them
Into each other:"
It seems to stop too suddenly and breaks the poem apart. I would simply say, "Etched within each other,"
