This piece seems so refreshing and natural to me. beautiful writing...

Quite impressed with the depth of this poem through clever personification of a universal attribute. The description of the dubious "gem" was among my favorite stanzas.

This feels a bit like something I've written as a teenager, around age sixteen. The very first line seems a bit off to me, like using the word “my” twice is a bit much in such a small sentence. I’m not crazy about having “as” on a line alone....it just doesn’t seem like the right time for a pause and the word doesn’t pack any power in the context here. The entire poem is rather cliche. but this first stanza is full of it. The whole “emerald eyes” thing is a bit childish. The second and third stanzas continue being cliche. The capitalization of “him” is stereotypical and adds nothing to the poem. Your last stanza, even with its obvious rhyming, is my favorite part even though it continues the childish theme that is found throughout the poem. Just my tiny two cents with no intention to be rude, just brutally honest.