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The sonnet refuses to shine
by Laura DoomEuphoria, a skim of stone content
to leap ad hoc from cloud to cloud, enthralls
dry whims that circumscribe the indolent
at play; diminished hypostasis mauls
the psychoactive mindset as it falls
to earth from lofty pique. As avatars
lose definition, psyche's hand installs
a spectrum indivisible by stars.
White silence scored by synchromesh guitars
is driven to distraction by the power
of Trojan horseshit; seedy Shangri-Las
produce the suites that turn harmonics sour.
Disquiet strives to reign and hails the calm
before the sturm und drang resounds alarm. 02/24/2010 Posted on 02/24/2010
Copyright © 2026 Laura Doom
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Jim Benz on 02/24/10 at 06:31 PM overlapping rhyme schemes, enjambment, wonderful word choices. what can I say? I'm dazzled. Something like this is not easy to write. And to make a truly good poem out of it, such that its formal restrictions take a back seat to the finished product, even while remaining true to its feet, adds additional dazzle to my dazzlement. And I haven't even begun to parse the concepts. |
| Posted by Kristina Woodhill on 02/24/10 at 09:36 PM It is truly a dazzlement - I do not think any form is beyond Laura's flexible, mighty pen. The word choices fill out the mouth and mind in ever expanding combinations. I can never figure out how to do the wrap-around lines in a sonnet and make them come out sensible, with the right stress. I read, I learn... Thank you. |
| Posted by Clara Mae Gregory on 03/01/10 at 11:08 AM I love the all the play on words,like pique for peak, for example...you have such an incredible ability to construct such magnificent lines in such confines.... ah Laura, I am jealous :) |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 03/17/10 at 03:32 PM drag sturm und drang through my mind / keep opening my windows / there are always layers to anything Laura_Doom, and I love the unfolding of them :) |
| Posted by Jason Moskalyk on 04/15/10 at 10:25 PM Oh my, such words! You are truly a poets' poet Ms.Doom! Totally killer. |
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