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once upon a good day

by Timothy Wilson

Late December
I think but I think its relevance withered a few months past
The fall of a dark empire in my mind
Everything anew
Everything was dancing
And no day holds comparison
To my day in the sun
My one day to feel

11/23/2009

Posted on 11/24/2009
Copyright © 2025 Timothy Wilson

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Shannon McEwen on 11/24/09 at 05:22 AM

I like this, for me L2 could use sharpening, perhaps removing one of the "i think"

Posted by V. Blake on 11/24/09 at 06:33 AM

I'm with Shannon on that second line, but I really liked "Everything anew / Everything was dancing." It's like you've got a three-line, dark poem in the beginning, and a three-line bright one at the end, and these two lines perfectly bridged the gap between them.

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