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Naked

by Alison McKenzie

Naked against this
Blanket of night, I wake to
Summer scents of rain

08/09/2009

Author's Note: Summer 2009 - SWEET

Posted on 08/09/2009
Copyright © 2026 Alison McKenzie

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Morgan D Hafele on 08/09/09 at 04:21 PM

beautiful.

Posted by A. Paige White on 08/09/09 at 05:30 PM

I do adore your summer sense of rain in this. The Mississippi summer taught us to cherish any cloud cover naked, or as close to naked as we can get. A sensory shower, sweet Ali.

Posted by Anita Mac on 08/11/09 at 03:35 AM

I love this moment. Masterful!

Posted by Laurie Blum on 08/13/09 at 11:44 AM

This is absolutely beautiful... I can feel the warm summer night against my skin. Perfectly expressed Alison!

Posted by Glenn Currier on 08/14/09 at 01:47 PM

Perfect. It could be a senryu or a haiku. It could be you awakening or the trees, a blade of grass. This imparts peace. Oneness with Mother Earth. Thanks for this sweet awakening.

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 08/14/09 at 06:28 PM

I love the first part of this Alison, but wish the second half (after the comma) could be just as outstanding; perhaps in time a better line will come. Congrats none the less on hitting No. 1.

Posted by Tony Whitaker on 08/15/09 at 11:57 AM

Sorry Glenn, but I actually enjoy the added alliteration as well as the olfactory and visual experience of the last line of this beauty. Well done Al-i-son!

Posted by Ken Harnisch on 08/16/09 at 05:37 AM

succinct and lovely...like that summer rain

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