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Eternal Love in Mockery
by Lyss CopelandWhat wouldnt I have given for your love?
For that tainted worm that you call a soul
Withering and sliming the sour dirt
Found within your wasted heart.
I would have given my mind, so you could
Have enjoyed a moment as a human being
With the emotions, heart, and passion
That led me to you and your rotting idea
Of eternal love in mockery
So you could understand the complexities of my soul
Warped into obedience and self-hate
All for you, all so I would be like you.
Could you understand how deeply my love could
Have spread in your body, choking and killing
All the weeds that had overtaken your senses
Flowering in your overgrown heart?
If you had let me love you,
Maybe you could have been human again
Human long enough for you to understand
How I could hate you with fiery passion.
But you chose not to understand
To see, to feel my little love bloom
You chose instead to choke my love child
With a shower of acidic hatred, burning
To the touch, but scouring in multitude,
And soil destroyed by cruelty,
So ruined, it still cannot support life to the fullest.
Contemptuous acts of viciousness
Pruned and hacked away
The leaves and petals needed
For my love to achieve its full beauty and happiness.
Yet I loved you even more
Like a spaniel whose master
Is their entire world
And receives kicks and blows
And treats them as if theyre
Acts of love from a god.
And that is why I hate you.
12/10/2008 Author's Note: So, this one is an oldie but not quite so much a goodie lol. This will be facing major revision over the next few days, so if you dislike it, let me know what you dont like :)
Posted on 12/10/2008
Copyright © 2025 Lyss Copeland
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/10/08 at 05:16 PM You might want to break up some of the lines a little, but that's the worst thing I can say about this. It's also a little too wordy in some of the lines, but I think that's just one of those things you'll fix yourself as you go through it and come up with better, more efficient ways of bringing some of this great imagery to life. I really did like this though. As I already said, I really like a lot of the imagery in a lot of this, and the voice is perfect. Really, if anything, the whole thing just needs to be fine-tuned some, and I'd venture to say you're more than equipped as a writer for that. |
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