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I Can Count on You
by David GarnerI can count on you
to disappear.
When I need you most,
"I am out of here,"
you say to me,
which leads me to
believe in trust,
but not in you.
I believe in
give and take and give.
I believe two lives
as one can live
without ignoring
a sense of self
a good head and
a heart and health.
I believe in this.
I can count on you
to disapprove.
When I come in close,
you always move
away from me,
which leads me to
believe in love,
but not in you.
I believe in
kiss and hug and kiss.
I believe love though
is hit or miss.
You close your eyes,
and then it's gone.
It's off one day.
And then it's on.
I believe in this.
01/07/2008 Posted on 01/07/2008
Copyright © 2025 David Garner
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Alison McKenzie on 01/08/08 at 04:51 AM I love the "which leads me to believe in (this but not that)" lines. They are profound. It's so difficult to imagine permanence where there is such contradiction. Very nicely written. |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 01/08/08 at 05:11 PM This one only takes the title and first line and then we sink into the meaning of ther poem... it too is songful and has the feeling of clarity gained (sadly) from experience. The fact of believing in "love" as "hit or miss" "off one day and then it's on" --this is a fine contrast and odd resolutuion... the rhyme at the end is very satisfying as it is such a clear realization, like solving an equation...(sigh) |
| Posted by Nanette Bellman on 01/09/08 at 10:32 PM this hits home. beautifully done. |
| Posted by Nikki Rice on 01/10/08 at 05:21 PM Nice, simple words and a wonderful rhythm. I really enjoyed this. :) |
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