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"I'll never dance with another, whooo"
by Johnny CrimsonSimply the best
was playing over and over in the mind
As he drove himself off the bridge
and into the choppy waters below
And as the song was drowned out he died smiling
Waiting to vote on Americas Next New First
Asian Latin Duo Mix Holiday Choir Mash Up
No Deal You Got The Meanest Lookin' Mouth Show
I decided to run
head first into the sword protruding from
my wall of warriors instead
That's reality
I sat at the light and watched the empty sidewalks
and pondered why no one uses them anymore
What was so unorthodox and off limits about them
Hell they could save lives
But fuck it
Let your children get run over
Let their brains mix with the salty roads
and end up a stiff concoction that I scrape from my headlights
While I stare intensely at the ass of a seemingly lonely girl
pushing her bicycle down the desperate sidewalk
and my excited mind begins to drift
And If I were a parent I'd now know why no one uses them
12/19/2007 Posted on 12/20/2007
Copyright © 2025 Johnny Crimson
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Anne Boulender on 12/20/07 at 02:45 AM this takes out of the land of giant deformed cookies and to the sidewalks of where it all comes apart. this poem all the poignancy of rape... ok i was just being obnoxious in that last sentence. but seriously, i do like the emphasis on the sidewalk here. things are as sinister as their beholder, or who ever is hogging the eye of the beholder. sometimes i wonder how you come up with this stuff. you seem to be a pretty nice guy. obviously, you are one of my favorite writers. i am a big fan. keep up the good work. |
| Posted by Anne Boulender on 12/20/07 at 02:46 AM here is my "corrected comment:
"this takes us out of the land of giant deformed cookies and to the sidewalks of where it all comes apart. this poem has all the poignancy of rape... ok i was just being obnoxious in that last sentence. but seriously, i do like the emphasis on the sidewalk here. things are as sinister as their beholder, or who ever is hogging the eye of the beholder. sometimes i wonder how you come up with this stuff. you seem to be a pretty nice guy. obviously, you are one of my favorite writers. i am a big fan. keep up the good work."
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| Posted by Anne Boulender on 12/20/07 at 02:46 AM good lord, when will the day come when i can leave a typo free comment? |
| Posted by Anne Boulender on 12/20/07 at 02:49 AM ok, now since i've ruined this with all my comments, i wanted to add that i thought the beginning was great. the action, driving your car into last waters while tina turner is singing. SMILING! that part about running into the weapon ruled too. its a thin line between nunchucks and fill in the blank. |
| Posted by Joe Cramer on 12/20/07 at 03:13 AM Excellent imagery portrayed in an economy of words..... |
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