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Underground Parking is for Pros!
by Johnny CrimsonIt smells like sheeps coat
and sticks to the inside of everything
I'm beating rags
with iron fists on your doorstep
And complacency fucked up my timing
For you were green and unaware
And now you're hog tied to a bumper
Simply love me is all I'm proposing
Simple enough until I'm finished here
Slave away at your mouth like a day job
You should have never agreed to meet me here 04/24/2007 Posted on 04/24/2007
Copyright © 2025 Johnny Crimson
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Anne Boulender on 04/25/07 at 12:03 AM this is pretty beautiful. first of all it makes total sense. i like how you follow the first couple of lines with "simply love me" and the begin the violence again. i actually thought the line was slave away at your mouthful of dayjob when i first read it. every line in here is good. and i like how it makes sense and isn't gratuitious either. |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 04/25/07 at 04:22 AM I don't know if I'd want to be on the other end of something like this. Wow. Especially in those last two stanzas. Terffic work, man. As always. |
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