This is really an exotic, delicately constructed poem, I think. The first statement is original. I don't think I have heard that said, and yet is is perfectly natural. To think of someone's "Pubic bone". Also the way the poem is set up-- with all the caps on each short line--it does have an explosive, leading feeling. I love the understated "so very unplatonic" --it's funny. And the "Sweat-drenched/Mane" (Mane even with a cap)--funny too, and yet it's not funny-- the eruption (which could refer to orgasmic as well as relationship/life rending ending) is central--as it begins and ends this piece. (Vesuvious being in the *south* of Italy seemed perfectly chosen.)