Eye in Three Parts by S.J. Tyler I. Glowing I’ve opened this flap In the door Time and again Each time my pupil dilated To absorb each scintilla of light To make out what shapes lay Beyond the three inch square Cut-out of the door But there was barely a clue To what I would find When I unlocked that door Only now, I peek to see what The future has in store And I can make out A glowing Small spot Getting larger as I watch My hand frantically attacks the door knob But as always this door is still locked I want to get in, go closer to that light See what it is, not so far away I need a key But until I get one I will be trapped Outside while air particles have More knowledge of this place than I do Someone touches my shoulder “I can let you in” they whisper but I dare not look away from the hole or I’ll lose the light I’ll lose the slightest/only clue I’ve received yet Do I take this chance and risk losing my hope? To find out what lies beyond Or do I keep my spot of light Never to know where it's coming from Right now, I keep staring out to it Pupils dilated To absorb each ray Debating whether the hope of a light on my path Is more valuable Than having the path itself II. Conquer Behind the dark slab I see a new beginning new world to conquer III. Eyeing the Future single eye can see only a present picture not a future one 11/09/2003 Author's Note: Reposted as I've made some changes. The picture should work and make more sense now. This was for an old scholarship that I later withdrew my application from, so I'll never know what might have happened. I still love this picture. The poems are probably flimsy. Posted on 05/14/2006 Copyright © 2025 S.J. Tyler Member Comments on this Poem Posted by Julie Adams on 05/16/06 at 07:41 PM I love the contemplative ideas encapsulated herein, but I wonder if I am looking at the beginnings of 2 related but seperate poems...glowing, being the most developed section commands attention and could potentially stand alone, whereas the last two sections, Conquer and Eyeing the Future, could perhaps be a placed in a seperate poem with a stanza engendering what "glowing" is about as the opening stanza, combined to mirror the other 2 short sections in length and potency...these are just ideas that came to mind...nevertheless, I LOVE THE PICTURE, by the way! In staza 3, not sure you need the ? after hope...but these are just ideas, really. Loved: "To absorb each scintilla of light" AND "I watch/ My hand frantically attacks the door knob"...well done...poetry FAR from "flimsy"! All the best, and I hope my comments didn't come off as invasive...take care and happy writing/reading, peace always, *jewels* Return to the Previous Page   pathetic.org Version 7.3.2 May 2004 Terms and Conditions of Use 0 member(s) and 2 visitor(s) online All works Copyright © 2025 their respective authors. Page Generated In 0 Second(s)