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Concerns
by Terry OlynikHe watched her
Through the kitchen window,
Sunning herself
On the deck he had built
With his
Father's help.
He hadn't had
A decent night's sleep
In weeks.
Concerns
About mortgage payments
And
Cutbacks at work.
This was not
What he had pictured
When he said
I do.
Observing her now
Through the kitchen window,
It appeared
She too had concerns.
About
Her
Tan lines.
11/09/2005
Posted on 11/10/2005
Copyright © 2025 Terry Olynik
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Charlie Morgan on 11/10/05 at 01:47 AM ...man o man, what a wham-o of life in the proverbial big city and you did the vast subject of needs, and longings...both taveling the same want-highway...lovely even tho' it could cause one to wince...peace, chaz |
| Posted by Elle O'Connor on 11/10/05 at 03:11 AM appearances can be deceiving. |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 11/10/05 at 10:08 AM Omniscience appears to be your strong suit, but yes, the mind of a woman is never easy to discern. The simplicity of your words is deceiving, because his mind must be on the tan lines... LOL!
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Rula Shin on 11/11/05 at 07:22 PM I like Michelle's comment and agree. In any case, thoughts/concerns are relative to the individual manifestation of experiences, conditions, and associations related to mechanical nature of the mind. A great little 'slice-of-life' scene you have going here, sprinkled with a dash of cynical bitterness despite the subtle indication that assumptions are dangerous :-) |
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