Corey, this poem is better than you think. Here's what I see. S1 - you have something that fits, but someone else shows you how to experience more. Punctuation after "works" - , ; : or double dash - might clarify the word "death" or should it be "death's"? S2 - New sensory experiences - yes, confusion, because you've never had them before. Still, it's wonderful. S3 - the other person increases your rhythm, which isn't so discordant any more - now there's something sweet in it - the melody. The transition you write about can be symbolic of the teen years. I'm not sure if this is your intent here, but my teen years were like this.
~Chelle~