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The Beach
by Uriel TovarHolding fast to ticking sand
Dripping from a trembling hand--
Time has passed
Me by. 12/03/2004 Posted on 12/03/2004
Copyright © 2025 Uriel Tovar
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Tom Goss on 12/03/04 at 03:59 PM I like this; I read it with a comma after "hand" and the last line in italics. |
| Posted by Anne Engelen on 12/03/04 at 08:28 PM looking forward to read more of your work! |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 12/03/04 at 08:43 PM Wonderful! I agree with Tom. Another suggestion is to delete 'this,' which will make it more universal, if still in the moment. |
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