| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Julie Adams on 12/15/08 at 11:09 AM Love love love: "I as instrument" and "blending Oceanic"...and I truly wish I'd written these lines: "Never fearing to be lost,/
never ceasing to be found."...you are a pleasure to read, to breathe in, to ponder...wonderful addition to your library...peace to u, ~jewels |
| Posted by Mary Frances Spencer on 12/15/08 at 12:10 PM Lovely! Adding this to my favorites! MFS |
| Posted by George Hoerner on 12/15/08 at 01:05 PM Really a wonderful write Jon! |
| Posted by Paul Lorenz on 12/15/08 at 02:55 PM ...there is something so triumphant and glorious about the words, and while i read, my mind wanders to a blazing sun, white linen on bare skin, arms and legs entwined...what does it all mean...? |
| Posted by Elizabeth Jill on 12/15/08 at 07:52 PM By this I am renewed, and have found a home for hymn. Thank you, old soul. |
| Posted by Gabriel Ricard on 12/16/08 at 12:50 AM Awesome. Just awesome. |
| Posted by Quinlan L Gibson on 12/17/08 at 10:28 AM "Never fearing to be lost,/ never ceasing to be found."...revelational (if that's really a word) I have to agree with Julie, fantastic and compelling line Mr. Kary. |
| Posted by Sarah Wolf on 12/17/08 at 11:02 AM Jon reading this makes my heart into a child... Thank you... :) |
| Posted by Chris Tate on 12/17/08 at 11:42 PM I would like to fall asleep for a while inside these words. |
| Posted by Lacy D Phillips on 12/18/08 at 02:35 AM This is instantly one of my favorite works of yours. The wonder and subtlety in this are unparalleled. |
| Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 12/27/08 at 07:26 PM stunning in such a soft, almost silent way. line 2 is beyond brilliant, and sets the tone for the whole -- incredible imagery through movement - the whirling fluid being, the vortice, throughout the piece, and you took me so right INSIDE of it. i love water imagery, and you make it so supple, so easy to slide along to... this is what poetry should be, what it should accomplish - taking the reader on that sensual journey. just as a scent of lavender can change brain chemistry, these words evoke emotion, changing the reader on a cellular level. i know i'm not the same anymore... masterful. magical. xopk |
| Posted by Kris Mara on 04/07/09 at 09:57 AM the flow in this is excellent - I get caught up in the sounds and pace -- it's written very precisely and thoughtfully. |