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The Ingredients
by Natalie JonesThere is what we are supposed to feel
about a situation, and then there
is the situation. We had the ingredients.
We sat there in the car. A coffee cup.
A sandwich. Your hand and mine.
I cannot pretend we were anything
other than alone. Consistently missed
opportunities for connection cannot be
mistaken for a shared life. There is the
correspondence between what I am really
like and what I wish I was like. This is
not a life I could go on recognizing.
I sat beside you for days and not once
did you touch me. We had the ingredients.
A smooth stone. A blue moon. Hearts. 09/07/2006 Posted on 09/08/2006
Copyright © 2010 Natalie Jones
| Member Comments on this Poem |
| Posted by Angela Nuzzo on 09/08/06 at 03:58 AM Oh my! This is wonderful. The simple statement, the simple scene, the soul-searching epiphany, and the simple realization. I love the repetition of the "ingredients" line. The ending is perfect. Nicely done! |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 09/09/06 at 01:20 AM Natalie, you summed it all up so well. The "ingredients" have to be pinched, poured and stirred just right to get the desire effect. How odd we humans are. Great write. |
| Posted by Richard Vince on 08/05/07 at 02:04 PM beautifully sad and wistful. a definite resonance with experiences of mine. a deserving POTD, that's for sure. |
| Posted by Kyle Anne Kish on 08/05/07 at 07:10 PM Congratulations on your POTD! :) |
| Posted by Michelle Angelini on 08/06/07 at 02:27 AM Congratulations on POTD! It's the description of a relationship coming apart. Sad, emotional, and bittersweet.
~Chelle~ |
| Posted by Kathleen Wilson on 10/25/07 at 10:57 AM Perfectly timed. Amazing ready set go to this. One can feel the air, in the "car" and even almost inside your head! wonderful. |
| Posted by Tim J Bono on 01/18/09 at 02:54 AM Wonderful read. I really like the mid-sentence break between the 2nd and 3rd paragraph. Also really enjoyed the line "This is
not a life I could go on recognizing." I can totally relate! |
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